Scene in the Rain...
Please note: This is not Detective Story and has nothing to do with it. Have a nice day.The gun is shaking. His arm is not steady. He looks tired, maybe even exhuasted. A look of fear and uncertainty is seen in his eyes. His loose hair hangs over his forehead. The gun is shaking. His finger is trying to pull the trigger, yet the mind or the heart does not want to. He stares forward; stares at his target.
The shooter has a goatee--black hair. He is young... yet old at the same time. He stands there in the rain. The stone path trembles beneath his shaking legs. It is slippery, his feet have a hard time balancing. He still stares forward. He still shakes the gun. He still does not pull the trigger.
He's cold, cold inside and cold outside. He does not know anymore. He doesn't know what to choose. He doesn't know what's right, what's wrong. He looks forward at his target.
They are on a hillside, yet in the heart of a city. A park surrounds them. Trees line the hill and there is a black fence potruding along the hill, parallel to them. Skyscrapers are visible around them. Its overcast and cloudy. The rain continues to fall.
The other man faces him. He stares into his eyes.
They are both silent. The shooter drops the gun. It hits the ground and slides in the rain.
He looks up to face his target. "...Get out of here," he orders him.
His target acknowledges him and slowly turns around to walk away in the hazy distance.
He knows he's failed his mission, but he doesn't care. He falls onto the ground. His hands are shaking and he is trembling. His gun lies below him in the grass. He reaches forward to grab it, but stops. He leaves it be.
He stands alone in the rain on the trodden path. He's cold and uncertain. He doesn't know anymore... He doesn't know.
Tears are almost falling from his eyes. He tries to get a grip of himself, he's a grown man. He manages to stand up. His hands are shaking so he makes a fist to stop it. He turns around and leaves this place.
Labels: Film Noir, Kendric's Story
posted by TheJBurger @ 3:51 PM
5 Comments:
It sounds to me like a director's script or something. I like it. There is a lot of paradoxy in it, which is ok. And you repeat something, "he doesn't know."
It sounds like a very deep kind of story and it sounds like an anime script. I started thinking that it was related to Cowboy Bebop.
Hahahahaha.
um.
Yeah it is like a screenplay-exactly, like a screenplay.
And yeah, i was kind of thinking cowboy bebop when i wrote it. It's almost the exact same scene as one in the show. Yeah it's like that cuz i ripped it off and i steal copyrights.
So yes I was almost rewriting a scene from cowboy bebop in screenplay/script style... good thing? bad thing? i dont know rea,llly.
...the 2nd ifedajay was me, thank you. and dont ask why or how it happened.
I see how it is...I see now who's been hacking through all my stuff...j/k
Um... no.
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